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Shikamaru’s pained huff brought Yoshino’s mind back to present time and place. Her mind had gone horribly off track and, by getting lost in her memories, she had applied too much pressure to a large, harsh bruise on her son’s face. She mentally reprimanded herself, immediately retracting her hands from the young man’s face and dunking her too-dry cloth back into the ice cold bucket of water by her side.

“It isn’t often I find you going out and getting into a fight, Shikamaru.” Yoshino said, shooting her son a pointed look. Her grunted and subconsciously shrunk under her gaze. The woman sighed and brought the cloth back up to his face to wipe of what remained of the dirt, grime, and blood. “In fact, I’ve never seen you get into any fight. You’ve always avoided them. They were always 'too troublesome' for you."

Shikamaru scowled and looked at the ground. Yoshino sighed and hung the cloth on the side of her bucket. She continued to question her  son as she reached a hand to her right and grabbed a soft, clean towel.

"What happened?" She asked, unfolding the towel carefully. "Did somebody insult Chouji-kun?" Yoshino gently patted Shikamaru's face dry, avoiding pressing too hard on his bruises and cuts.

Shikamaru averted his gaze. "No, Kaa-san. Chouji is fine." He said in his usual bored voice. Yoshino frowned.

"Did something happen to Ino-chan, then?" She asked, pulling her hands back and setting the towel aside. 

"That troublesome woman is fine." He grumbled, slouching forward and leaning over his knees.

Yoshino resisted huffing in annoyance. Her son was injured; she couldn't just go hitting him in the head and demanding he tell her what happened. However, there were several things that could possibly have happened. The very few she had managed to narrow down as the most likely were being eliminated.

"Did Tsunade-sama assign you to catch Tora again to-" Yoshino gave her son a look as she quoted back to him his own words. "-‘appease her sadistic mind'?"

Shikamaru rolled his eyes. "No. Kiba is doing it this time."

Yoshino's lips twitched in amusement before setting back into a line. "Then what happened?"

"..." The Nara heir was silent.

Yoshino sighed and stood to retrieve the first aid kit from its basket in the pantry. The silence continued, only being interrupted by the Nara woman's soft footsteps and the rough sound of the basket being slid off the shelf. It was agonizing and her patience was waning, curiosity beginning to churn wildly within her.

"...did you get in a bar fight?" She asked, breaking the silence. Shikamaru looked up at her with a deep frown and a disbelieving look.

"I'm not Tou-san, Kaa-san." He said irritably.

"Did Ino-chan finally decide hitting you on the top of the head will only make you lazier?"

"Ino is too mentally preoccupied to think about that."

"Did Tsunade-sama get drunk again and throw a bottle of sake at your face?"

"Even while intoxicated, Tsunade-sama loves her liquor too much to use it as a weapon if unnecessary."

"Very true...did Tsunade-sama throw an empty sake bottle at your face?"

"Mendokuse. No, she didn't."

"Did Naruto-kun attempt to practice a new jutsu in public - again?"

"Naruto is in the hospital with a broken arm."

"Did you make the unhealthy decision of becoming a masochistic and met with Anko?"

"That's not a masochistic decision, Kaa-san. That's a death wish."

"Another truth. Very well, did you walk into the critical condition area of Konoha's asylum?"

"I interact with other shinobi on a daily basis, Kaa-chan."

"Than what the hell happened to you?" Yoshino screeched, slamming the bottle of disinfectant on the table. Shikamaru shoved aside the  urge to wince and instead threw his head back to look at the ceiling.

"Mendokuse..." He muttered.

Yoshino's hands went straight to her hair and she tugged on the locks in frustration. "AGH!"

At that moment, the sound of the front door opening and closing echoed through the house. This caused Yoshino to stop her attempt at pulling all of her hair out as she yelled, "SHIKAKU!"

There was a thud, signifying that her husband had discarded his shoes carelessly by the front door - she made a mental note to yell at him about it later - and then the lazy shuffling of his heavy footsteps. The Nara head yawned as he dragged himself through the door and into the kitchen and dining area.

"Mendokuse. What's wrong now, you troublesome woman?" Shikaku drawled, retrieving a bottle from a cabinet above the stove and a glass. Yoshino ground her teeth together and stopped herself from throwing something at him.

"Shikamaru went and got himself in a fight and he won't tell me what happened!" Yoshino exclaimed, throwing her arms into the air and glaring at the man.

Shikaku looked over at his lazy son, face bruised and cut, and huffed. "Why didn't you just tell her, boy? Saves us both some trouble." He  removed the cork and poured himself a glass of what was undeniably something alcoholic.

"It's too troublesome." Shikamaru replied easily. Shikaku nodded at the boy and took a sip of his drink.

"Alright." He said. Yoshino turned to face him in an instant.

"Alright?! Alright?! What do you mean 'alright'?!" She yelled, slamming her palm on the table. She eyed the kunai that was lying haphazardly on the kitchen counter and she considered that maybe throwing something wasn't all that bad of an idea.

Shikaku shrugged indifferently and took another drink. "You heard the gaki. It's too troublesome."

Yoshino screamed in outrage. "I don't care how troublesome it is! You'll tell me! I'm just being a concerned mother!"

Shikamaru looked at his father with what one would call a "pleading" expression. However, Shikamaru does not plead, and therefore his look was categorized as one of politely asking for help.

"What? You heard your mother. Just tell her whatever it is and this whole troublesome thing will go away." Shikaku told his son waving a hand through the air as if doing something as simple as that was too much effort. "Did Sakura decide to use you as a punching bag? Were you attacked by an enemy shinobi? Did Tsunade-sama throw an empty bottle at you-"

(Shikamaru groaned and shook his head with only an utter of, "Troublesome.")

"-? Was it a training accident? The answer shouldn't be too hard, son." Shikaku finished.

"It was a training accident." Shikamaru drawled reluctantly, realizing that if he didn't say anything he'd just get into more trouble.

Yoshino stopped pacing and looked at her son. "Who were you training with? I didn't you were training with Chouji-kun and Ino-chan until Friday."

"I'm not." Shikamaru replied. He leaned back in his chair with a sigh. "Temari is in town again. She just wanted a spar, that's all."

"That doesn't look like she 'just wanted a spar', son." Shikaku said, eyeing Shikamaru. "It looks she wanted to beat you up." He shrugged and took another drink. "Did a mighty fine job of it, from what I can tell."

A redness began to spread across Shikamaru's cheeks and the young man coughed, staring off to the right. Shikaku raised an eyebrow at his son's reaction.

"She was angry and needed someone to take it out on." Shikamaru explained.

"That doesn't sound like the sort of the thing Temari-chan would do, though." Yoshino said, eyebrows knit together as she thought. "Temari-chan has always struck me as the kind of person who wasn't too easily enraged. And if she ever took it out on anybody it would be the person who pushed her buttons in the first place." A thought suddenly struck the woman and she blinked.

"...troublesome..." Shikamaru muttered.

"I didn't think you were a masochist, son." Shikaku said, smiling lopsidedly. There was a twinkle in his eyes that Shikamaru had never had much of a liking for.

The blush his face had begun to take on strengthened. The tips of his ears felt incredibly hot and he just wanted to get the hell out of there. I should have just gone to the hospital. Shikamaru thought exasperatedly.

"Did you provoke Temari-chan, Shikamaru?" Yoshino asked, looking at her son with a small smile. The pineapple-headed boy's embarrassed 'Mendokuse' was all the conformation she needed.

"Tell me, boy - is she cute when she's angry?" Shikaku asked with a smirk. His son's face became a delightful tomato red.

Yoshino was silent for only a moment before the squeal erupted from her throat. Shikaku threw his head back and laughed before the realization hit him full force and stopped. He blinked and leaned back in his chair.

"My God…he actually likes a girl." He blinked again and looked at his empty glass. "I need another drink."

Yoshino was too busy smiling and talking to Shikaku at a rapid pace. Shikamaru scowled and stood up.

"Ugh. So troublesome." He said to himself before leaving the house and going to the hospital like he should have in the first place.

On his way, he wondered if perhaps he would see Temari again tomorrow. The blonde Sunan kunoichi was quite the beauty when angered and he began to think of ways he could go about enraging her the next time.

It took the Nara genius several long moments to suddenly stop in the middle of the road and realize his father was right; he had turned into a masochist.

(But it was an enjoyable kind of self-harm so he supposed it was okay.)

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I got this idea from a discussion with my amazing friend ~Pipe-stream. BRO LOVE FOREVAHHHH. She, like myself, loves ShikaTema!!! WOOHOO!!!! And we like having these lonnnngggg discussions about the Naruto-verse and stuff and we come up with some crazy ideas sometimes.

Anyways, the idea this time was "Shikamaru has this screwed up thought that Temari is really cute when she's angry. So sometimes he'll just do things to intentionally piss her off." That, however, wasn't what actually triggered me to write this. It was all about what dear lovely Ashley had said in response. She had said that Yoshino would be in a "rare squealy moment" if she ever found out that fact about Shikamaru. So basically...I had begun to write a short prompt back to her in the comment but then when it got too long I stopped and realized I could SO write a fanfiction with this.

It was at first about Yoshino and her squealing habits. But then that part didn't fit in with the rest of the story so I plan on just posting that separately as it's own little prompt. Or maybe expand upon the idea and the short little subject and then post it.

ANYWAYS. I'm reluctant to call this ShikaTema because it really isn't. It's very minor and only there if you squint. And it's a bit one-sided here. Since it's from Shikamaru's perspective.

And now for disclaimers.

Naruto (c) Masashi Kishimoto
The lines "My God...he actually likes a girl." And "Ugh. So troublesome" were created by ~Pipe-stream

PLEASE TELL ME IF I GOT ANYBODY OOC. Because Shikamaru seems wayyyyy OOC and I don't know if I captured Yoshino correctly. I think I got Shikaku spot on though :XD: But yeah, I feel like Shikamaru is out of character. I've always found him a bit difficult to write for because of the way he is. The laziness is easy. It's the intelligence and strategic part of him that I have trouble including. Because I'm just not as smart as Shikamaru. Blah.

OH YEAH. THIS IS ALSO DEDICATED TO ~Pipe-stream BECAUSE SHE GAVE ME THE IDEA. Thank you Ashley~!
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The fic is actually very good. Some minor mistakes, but the freshness of the story, as well the impact it had on me made me forget them... I love the shipping, and I congratulate you I think there was no OOC at any time. The way Yoshino acted, the laziness of Shikamaru and Shikaku hit the spot.
I wish i could know why temari decided she wanted to kill shikamaru, but that0s just a fangirl curiosity....
Loved the litle detail at the end of it.
I would higly recommend this fic, and absolutely belongs to my favorite. Keep on writting!
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Emzie92 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aaah this is the cutest thing!! I love the little ending in subbed text >w<

And when the Mum is reeling off all the ways he could have been hurt, I loved that bit too. The way you write is so ensnaring Don't think I've ever said that before. 8I and clever. :D
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xBrokenRecordx Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
:blush: Thank you! I feel like I didn't portray Yoshino correctly though :X Shikaku I feel is fine but Yoshino...I feel like I sucked at writing her. And Shikamaru. I feel like I just killed his character. Just. Miserable. Failure. I FAILEDDDDD.

Is this really that good?! I liked the writing of it but just...the writing is good but the situation and characters could have been portrayed better :X I trust your opinion. Is it really that good? D:

Ensnaring? :XD: :huggle:

Clever?! :blush:

THANK YOU EMZZZ. :iconletmehugyouplz:
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Emzie92 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so welcome!! I think it's fab- you did not kill Shikamaru's character! I think you portrayed him really well! I don't know Yoshino well enough to judge, but I think she worked well in this as you wrote her ^^

Oh yes indeedy, very ensnaring. :iconisayplz:

No problem dearie! :iconsneakhugplz:
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AzulaCR09 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student General Artist
Very nicely done... Clean, fresh, funny, not OOC at all. Love it!
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xBrokenRecordx Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :blush:
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Pipe-stream Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I found myself taking notes of all the little parts I loved in this (also of some parts that you could improve on)
I'll just list them here because I don't feel like writing a proper, structured review so troublesome >8D

- Minor mistake: He grunted, not her grunted. Second paragraph.
- "She couldn't just go hitting him in the head and demanding he tell her what happened." I can imagine her doing this :D
- "Yoshino gave her son a look as she quoted back to him his own words" This too
- "Kiba is doing it this time." Haha poor Kiba :XD:
- "..." :XD:
- "I'm not Tou-san, Kaa-san." Pfffttt Shikaku gets in bar fights huh?
- "Did Ino-chan finally decide hitting you on the top of the head will only make you lazier?" Don't they want him not to get lazier? So why would Ino hit him if it just encouraged that..?
I don't know if it's just me who didn't get this
- "...empty sake bottle at your face?" "Mendokuse." I love that little exchange :D
- "Mendokuse. What's wrong now, you troublesome woman?" Ok... personally I think you have a tendency to overdo the whole 'troublesome' thing sometimes. Mendokuse essentially means troublesome, so here Shikaku would be saying it twice in one sentence. That's a bit much. Also saying 'you' makes it sound slightly accusing to me... saying she's troublesome is enough, I think, he doesn't need to say 'you'.
- "Alright" "Alright?! Alright?! What do you mean 'alright'?!" That is exactly what would happen :XD:
- "Did Tsunade-sama throw an empty bottle at you-" (Shikamaru groaned and shook his head with only an utter of, "Troublesome.") Nice slipping that in twice, and Shikamaru's reaction was spot on :D Though now that I look at it again... I don't think you need to put 'only'. I think it sounds better without it.
- When Shikamaru blushed :aww: I also liked that part
- "twinkle in his eyes." It's an evil twinkle >8D
- "Tell me boy - is she cute when she's angry?" I burst out laughing!!
- "Yoshino was silent for only a moment before the squeal erupted from her throat. Shikaku threw his head back and laughed before the realization hit him full force and stopped. He blinked and leaned back in his chair." Loved their reactions :D But again, I don't think you should put 'only'. It's unnecessary since we already know it was for a moment.
- "My God... he actually likes a girl." HAH I see it :D He blinked again and looked at his empty glass. "I need another drink." Haha nice :XD:
- "several long moments." Eh.... wouldn't that just be one long moment? When I see several long moments I think of them as separate... and that just doesn't seem right. It just doesn't. Do you know what I mean?
- Hm. Actually the ending was kinda eh. I think it's because Shikamaru getting up and going out was sudden after the vast majority of the story being in one place, in one room, without much movement. Also that last sentence in subscript and brackets kind of breaks the flow... you have to adjust to a different size and it's like an unsure ending so the reader doesn't know to add it in to the story or not... I know for me, when I was reading it, I was like "eh... what's this little bit here..." and it ruins the ending a little bit. Maybe you could reword it to suit you and the story better, and add it in in the normal font? Or have it in the description instead and leave it out of the story. Just so the ending is more rounded.

I think that's all I have to say. That last point I wasn't originally going to add in, but stuff just came to me as I was writing this... it's all over the place and really long I think but I can't be bothered making it more ordered now.
And I used so many smiley faces. :roll:

Oh... in regards to the OOC stuff... I don't think you got anybody ooc. There's just the thing with them saying "Mendokuse" a lot. And like ~cas42 said, Shikamaru acted like he would in these circumstances.
Yeah, writing the genius side of him is hard. But I don't think you have to be AS smart as Shikamaru, all you really have to do is be smarter than the readers. I discovered that from reading other fanfics... the author pulls some awesome, smart twist that the readers doesn't see coming to make Shikamaru seem like he really does have an IQ of over 200.
I think it's a bit like a magic trick. Or something.

ANYWAY. I'll finish up now, gods this is really long.
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xBrokenRecordx Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
First of all: Mendokuse roughly translates into "What a drag." not "Troublesome". Just thought I'd let you know. I wouldn't have used it if I didn't know what it meant and I hate repeating the same word twice in a single sentence if if doesn't flow. I don't even like using it in consecutive sentences. So a lot of the time I read it out loud and then change it if it just doesn't sound right. But yeah, Mendokuse means "What a drag." In the English anime, Naruto's "Dattebayo's" are "Believe it!"s and Shikamaru's "Mendokuse"s are "What a drag"s but they still keep troublesome. It's so annoying.

So really the line was supposed to sound more like, "What a drag. What is it now, you troublesome woman?" And Shikaku is...Shikaku. I meant for the "you" in there because he was directing the question at her, I guess. And it just sounds wrong to me with "What is it now, troublesome woman?"

-I'll go fix that when I'm done typing this comment :XD: The minor mistake, that is.
-And that would be PRECISELY why I put that in there. It wasn't in my original *terrible* draft so reading through it I added it in there. Not only because I had taken a chunk out of the beginning and I needed more words but also because I needed to make it flow more.
-Yoshino is indeed a "troublesome woman" XD It's a "curse" of the Nara men that they always end up falling in love with troublesome women XD I have this weird thought that to get her point across or to talk sense into people or something, Yoshino will quote back their own words. I have more elaboration on this but I'll save that for another time XD
-Poor Akamaru, you mean. Oh and I guess Kiba, too :XD: Tsunade really does have a sadistic mind, though :XD:
-He does sometimes. I have this thought that Shikaku like his sake almost as much as Tsunade does. So whenever they have a weekend off, Shikaku, Inoichi, and Chouza will all go to a bar and catch up and have some drinks. And then by the end of the night Shikaku has too much to drink and doesn't know exactly what he's doing so he gets in a fight XD (Inoichi just whistles as he leaves the bar and Chouza hurries home because he doesn't want to be there when Yoshino does XD ) That explanation probably ruined the story ._.
-I think that a better word would be "realize"...Ino doesn't realize that it makes him lazier. Yeah. That's better. I should change that, too.
-I'll take out the "only". It does sound a bit overused and makes no sense, I guess....
-It is >8D It's the kind of twinkle you see in a friend's eye before they start teasing you half to death :XD:
-Why...I don't get what's so cute about him just starting to blu- Oh...okay. Now I see it. It is kind of cute :XD:
-But the "My God...he actually likes a girl." part is yours ._. credit should go to YOU.
-The ending was supposed to be like that. Not because I was uncertain but because it was supposed to be something like it was a thought he wanted to admit to no one. Ugh it's hard to explain.


I'm terrible with criticism. I just don't take it very well because it makes me angry. I don't know why, sometimes, but it does. Just. Ergh. I did get a bit upset reading your comment but overall, I think I took it well. You have a lot of points and I guess I just get upset when people don't understand what I mean the first time. I also sometimes take criticism the wrong way because most of the criticism I get is from my dad. And my dad is blunt when he criticizes me. And when my dad is blunt, he sounds damn mean and I hate it and it makes me angry. So, that's how that came about. Ugh. I hope you understand because I feel like I sound really stupid. Blugh.

I'm glad you added the last bit in. I wouldn't have known otherwise. I think I'll take some time and reread it and see if I can make any part of it better.

It does sound like a magic trick :XD: And I've read lots of stories with strategizing!Shikamaru and some of them I feel make him sound less strategic than he really is (Like when they say Shikamaru doesn't know how to get out of a situation when I can plainly see some sort of way and Shikamaru can't think of that? What the hell. That's just not right. I think they just decide that Shikamaru is too hard to write so they don't make an effort to think up some sort of way to get through something. I also hate it when they make him SOOOOO out of character. It's...just...ugh. Can't stand it.). And then in some stories they pull off this huge long explanation that makes no sense to me and I blink and go "lolwut" and then I reread it and I go "That...that's actually really quite a good way to go about that..." or sometimes I read a story and part of Shikamaru's explanation is "Oh wow this is go-. Wait. That part's fine but what about this one thing? Did you forget about that one thing?" And then fanfic!Shikamaru realizes later that he forgot something and I'm like "NO. NONONONONO. When Shikamaru comes up with a strategy, he takes in and remembers every aspect of the situation to come up with the most effective plan. Why are you putting Shikamaru in your fanfic if you don't understand the character enough to actually make him in character?!"

It's just really annoying. Blah.

THIS IS PROBABLY LONGER. SORRY.
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Pipe-stream Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, ok...

That's ok with the criticism thing :D I remember a few years ago, back when I was still writing a lot... whenever someone gave me criticism I just couldn't take it and I got angry as well. I thought that they didn't understand where I was coming from when in fact they were giving me some really good advice.
Looking back on it now, I realise how useful critiques are... so now I try my best to take in whatever the person says.

All those things you said about how people write strategic!Shikamaru. I HATE THEM TOO.
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cas42 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Your story is brilliant.

I think that, given the circumstances, Shikamaru behaved exactly as Shikamaru would. Yoshino... Well, I don't know if I could actually see her squealing per se, but I guess the realization her son was interested in anything other than shogi would do it. I agree with you Shikaku is dead on.

I've always thought the Yoshino/Shikaku was way underutilized for comic relief in the Naruto series... You just did a nice job making up for that here.

Great short story.

-Cas
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xBrokenRecordx Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
:bulletorange: I had actually started writing this with a little prompt about Yoshino. It didn't fit with the rest of the story so I took it out. It was about her and squealing. Um, all I have to say about that is that I get good ideas from really weird ones.
:bulletorange: Precisely. Yoshino just doesn't strike me as the kind of person who would react with girlish squeals or bounce excitedly. That is, unless, something happens that would give her a legitimate reason to do so. In this case, it's much like what you said: "-but I guess the realization that her son was interested in anything other than shogi would do it."
:bulletorange: Shikaku is easier to write for. I don't know why at all, especially since Shikamaru inherited much of his personality from Shikaku. Shikamaru is hard to write but Shikaku isn't? What? Yeah. I confuse myself.
:bulletorange: Shikaku and Yoshino are under-appreciated characters. They have a very unique relationship and it's sad that people don't take the time to explore it. It's even more upsetting that they get so few appearances in the manga/anime. Kishimoto created such amazing characters and...he doesn't use them? How sad.


Thank you very much for the comment! And if you've gotten this far reading it...thanks for enduring my rambling. I tend to rant/ramble to people no matter who they are about some little things. Um, sorry :|
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